Ooh! Really good! I absolutely love it. It was really well done (and hopeful! Yay for non-angsty poetry heh). One thing, though: "Among the life there came new birth" is only eight syllables. Sorry, I'm a bit picky (aka neurotic) when it comes to Shakespeare and iambic pentameter...heh.
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Date: 2008-10-10 02:51 am (UTC)